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In Vauban, Germany residents are living without cars. One women Heidrun Walter, a mother of two, explains how she is much happier without her car.  57 percent of people have moved to the community when they heard about the community. It is said to be called smart planning. Cars are responsible for 12 percent of greenhouse gas emissions in Europe and up to 50 percent in the U.S.. You don't have to worry about how your going to make it to your favorite store or market without a car because stores are places a walk away, on main street. The Enviormental Protection Agency is promoting car educed communities and legislators are starting to act.

Paris enforced a limiting driving ban to clear the air of the global city. Congestion was down 60 percent in the capital of France just after five days. France enacted a tax policy that favors diesel over gasoline.

Bogota, Colombia created a program called the car-free day. Powerful people from other countries camre to Bogota to see the mindblowing event. Parks and sports center have been createdbecause of this event.

In the U.S. Americans are buying fewer cars, driving less and getting feweer licenses as each year goes by. Rates of car ownership per household and per person strted to come down two to three years befpre the downturn. Teens are starting to organize their life around when they can walk, take public transportation or car-pool.

If we were to limit car usuage will the enviroment get better or stay the same? Nobody is saying to get rid of all cars, people are just saying that we can limit the amount of cars we use or the amount of time we  spend driving them. Limiting car usuage is a very big step in a revolutionary change and also has alot of advantages to them.         In the article "The Challenge of Exploring Venus", it tals about how scientest are working on new technology to overcome the chalanges of Venus and its complications. In the begining of the artical it talks abou how Venus isthe second closest planet from the sun and how it is one of the two most similar planets to Earth. Since it has similarities to Earths' size and density scientest have sentunmanded spacecrafts to Venus to investigate.

Unfortunatlly no space craft has survived acording to the last two sentances of paragraph two. In the beginning of paragraph three it states how a thick atmosphere of almost 97 percent of carbon dioxide engulfs Venus. The clouds on this planet are also highly currosive with sulfuric acid in them. The planets surface averages about 800 degrees Fahrenheit and the atmospheric presure is 90 times greater than on Earth. This concludes that Venus has the hotest surface tempreature of any planet in our solar system. Venus also has obsticals like erupting valcanos, earthquakes, and frequent lightning stikes on the planets surface.

With all these complications though scientest still are curious about this dangerous planet. In the second sentance of the fourth paragraph it explains that astronomers are curious because it may have been the most Earth like planet in our solar system. The planet resembles a surface with rocky sediment and includes things such as valleys, mountains, and craters.

In the fifth paragraph it states that NASA is coming up with possible solutions to avoid most of these issues. One of them is inventing is a small vehical that resembles a blimp floating 30 miles above Venus's landscape.

Now this doesn't get the scientest what they want exactly what they want because due to the planets atmospher light doesn't peneatrate very well making it difficult to observe ground conditions. It also limits the amount that you would see in pictures and vidoes of the planet. Many researchers are working on new inventions so macheines will last longer on the harsh planet.

For example in the seventh paragraph NASA states that it has been working on electronics made of silicon carbon and they have even tested it a chamber concluding that it lasted in the harsh conditions for three weeks. They are also recyclaling old ideas from the 1800's, they are trying to use a computor that does calculations,but theinvention uses gears and levers, meaning that it doesn't require any electricity to work.

Scientest are working hard to accheve this goal to explore this harsh mystery planet. They accept the challanges that come with it and they strive to succeed not only to gain insight but to quench their curiosity that all humans have about this planet and the possibilities that it could lead to. So you want to be a Seagoing Cowboy but you think it is a very stupid boring job well sorry to bring it to you but it is once in a lifetime experience. It is so amazing to see all of the different countries while your at it.

The job of a Seagoing Cowboy is very adventures. If you are a adventures guy this is perfect you get to see many great places in the world, and who doesn't want to see new places, it is a blast. You can see many amazing places like I did say for example the Panama Canals they were really cool. You get to experience many great things like going to Venice, Italy, "A city with streets of water." You get to visit many more great places like these but sometimes it does take some time to get there but that is just part of the fun.

This job is also very awesome because you can have a lot of fun while doing this job. There are a lot of fun things to do when you are a Seagoing Cowboy for example after you are done with the main job which would be delivering the stuff you can play many different games and puzzles onboard the ship. They are really really fun for example you get to play baseball, volleyball, and even have table-tennis tournaments you could all that in the place were you held the animals, I had a lot of fun and I still do I love this job.

Seagoing Cowboy is a really cool job to have you get to travel to so many new places and see a bunch of cool things and on this job everything is fun. It is really fun having this job and I do recommend takking this job it is really awesome.Dear state senator, as time moves on things needs to change. The way we vote for our president is unfair, outdatede, and irrational.

It is time we change things and move to a election by popular vote.

The electoral college was founded many years ago by The Founding Fathers. It was a compromise between the election of our President. It selected electors thats would put the vote in after we voted. It was a great idea back then... I think it is time we change this and let the people vote. We cann't use the same ways as time moves on. This should be an election for the people.

In the electoral voters don't even vote for the president. They vote for than elector. This could very well be anyone holding public office. People sometimes get confused and vote for the wrong candiddate. Back in 1960 louisiana nearly succeeded in replacing all demoratic electors with ones that oppose John F. Kennedy. Somestimes faithless electors have refused to vote for their party. This is outrageous! What is this happens again. With the time and place we are at now these things should not be happening.

Futhermore, the people should elect who becomes OUR president. We are the that have to live with this president. Another reason is because its unfair to voters, the winner-takes-all system shows that caue candidates don't spend time in states they know wont will. And if the electoral college gets a tie it would be horrifying. Leaving it up to the House of Representatives.

All of this is to show that electoral college should be Abolished. This is outdated, unfair, and irrational use. Putting our faith in people we don't know has caused problems.     Raither than using technology to guess on students emotions I feel that teachers should ask and be there for a student. Looking at a peace of art work and seeing that a child is unhappy is easy to spot. Teachers have a hard time conecting with their studens because they dont know how to comunacate with them. How can we say that this Technology will do a better job then the teachers that we have now.

Technology on the other hand is only guessing on if a student is upset or angry or even happy. Although the technology could see if a child is board or confused. That is a huge pluss espesly if that means the lession can be changes to make the children understand what they are learing. Every student learns a diffrent way. Not everyone will understand at the same pase or be able to comunacate that they are strugling to understand something.

By using this technology learning can be a hole new and exciting thing for a lot of students. If this technology works then a lot of stand off students can be more intuned on lessons they need to understand and know. Driving or any moter transpertaion is a bad source to the enviroment. some people around the world help the planet by using car pools or bikes, and others ways to travel useing less gass and polloution to get around. And even countrys are helping out.

The data shown in the passage is that many poeple chose to sell there cars and chose to use other reasoures to get around. in the text it says , " when i had a car i  was always tense. im much happier this way". this qoute showes that having a car isnt as fun as people say. it can leave to stress and make people feel very tense. some people cant live without their cars , but others travel on bike and busses to not just do to do it, but to make a difference and help the earth. Data has been shown that the driving in America has decreased over the years and study shows that the driving by young people has decreased 23 percent between 2001 and 2009. My response to this would be that all of this, is that people are trying to help and make for something better

Getting around without cars isnt just happening with small time people, Countrys are even getting involed. for example Paris, after days of near-record pollution, Paris enforced a patial driving ban to clear the air of the global city. motorists in paris with numbered license are told to leave there cars at home, if not they would have to suffer a 22-euro fine. this is a great way to allow less pollution go into the atomshere, this also helps everyone even if they dont know it. And not just paris has a car-free day, but Bogota , Colmbia use this as well. many colombians hiked , biked, skated or took busss to work during a car-free day. this helps our planet so much even if its a small thing it help little by little.

Many countrys do a great thing by doing this and it helps and even if the trip from A to B might take a little longer, its worth it. usage of cars being less used is a very important thing people do .   Countries and cities all across the world are joining in on the "no car" trend, and it seems to be no passing fad. From Germany, to France, to Columbia, to the United States, everybody is trying to start drving less for a cleaner, happier world. Countries' governments everywhere are trying to get people off the roads and start biking, walking, or using public transportation instead. As the people in these countries have learned, there are many advantages to giving up drving cars, if even only for a few days rather than their entire lives.

The main advantage is a cleaner planet. Emissions that cars release play a large role in the world's air pollution. Carbon emissions create smog that makes the sky grey, damages our lungs, and harms the plants that give us clean air. Due to carbon emissions from cars, Paris once had as much smog as "Beijjing, China, which is known as one of the most polluted cities in the world" (Source 2). If we start driving less cars it will have really beneficial implications for the environment, especially "... since transportation is the second largest source of America's emissions, just behind power plants" (Source 4). Imagine what positive effects banning cars would have on the population's and world's health.

One positive effect would be a lot less stress. Driving is a dangerous activity where you are constantly putting yourself at risk. Many people realize this and tend to be scared of driving or are constantly nervous when they drive. Rushing to drive to work on time also creates negative stress. Says German media trainer and mother, Heidrun Walter, of no longer owning a car, "When I had a car I was always tense. I'm much happier this way." Daily long commutes are also a large determining factor in someone's mood. Some people have to drive for hours a day just to get to their already stressful job and then again when they go back home. This creates for a very unhappy society. Now there are a couple of good things that come from a society that is no longer obsessed with car culture. One thing is that "the Internet makes telecommuting possible and allows people to feel more connected without driving to meet friends" (Source 4). This lessens the need have a car to take you to distant places. With the banning or lessening use of personal vehicles cities and towns are being rebuilt. "In this new approach, stores are placed a walk away, on a main street, rather than in malls along some distant highway" (Source 1). This has encouraged healthier and cheaper modes of transportation such as walking, skating, bicycling, and public transportation such as buses.

Fewer cars and this rebuilding of cities saves you money and commute time. Just think about all those rising gas prices. You don't need to pay tolls when you walk, or get fined when you run too fast. Prices for parking spots and passing tolls are going up anyway. It's an easier and cheaper alternative to just walk or bike somewhere. Public transportation like buses and subways cost a lot less too. Studies have found that fewer people are buying cars and getting their licenses; it's for a reason.

Lastly, not only are leaders across the globe joining in on the idea of life without cars, but so are car-selling companies. "Companies like Ford and Mercedes are already rebranding themeselves "mobility" companies with a broader product range beyond the personal vehicle" (Source 4). Even Bill Ford, executive chariman of the Ford Motor Company proposed a business plan in which "personal vehicle ownership is impractical or undesirable." Ford suggested becoming partners with the telecommunications industry to create cities in which "pedestrian, bicycle, private cars, commercial and public transportation traffic are woven into a connected network to save time, conserve resources, lower emissions and improve safety" (Source 4).

So next time you think about buying a new car or driving to work all buy yourself, try to rethink your actions and imagine the effect it will have on not only you, but everyone around you. Maybe you can bike to work if it's not that far, take the bus instead, carpool with some coworkers. The planet and future generations will thank you if you just limit your car usage, even a little bit at a time.   Dear State Senator,

I am agreeing in favor of keeping the Electoral College. There is no need to change to election by popular vote for the president of the United States. That is because the House of Representatiives helps elect for us, it helps us to balance our votes, and avoid problems of election. The Electoraal college helps the people out alot with the voting situation and helps us to better undrstand and know our new president.

The broader significance of the electoral College is that the House of Representatives helps us vote for our new president. In source One paragraph three it says "Your state's entitled alloment of electors equal the number of members in its Congressional delegation: one for each number in the House of Representatives plus two for your Senators...."That tells me that we the people are not alone in this process of voting who will be our next president. Also in the same source but paragraph five it states "The electors are generally chosen by the candidate's political party." This informs me that not only the House of Representavtives is involved in the elections.  Tthe govenment is important to the Electoal College because the votes of the government count most to the College.

It is evident that the Electoral College helps us to balance our votes. As stated in Source Three "The Electoral College restores some of the weight in the political balance that large states (by population) lose by virtue of the mal-apportionment of the Senate decreed in the Constitution..." This lets me know that we -as the people- won't have to worry to much about the voting and selection of the president. Another peice of evidence stated in the same source and paragraph "So, other things being equal, a large state gets more attention from presidential candidates in a campaign than a small state does..." That states that not all people and states have to worry about who the president will be. The Electoral College hepls us out alot mostly to the big states in the United States.

Above all the Electoral College avoid problems of the elections. In source Three, paragraph Twenty-two it states "The Electoral College avoids problems of the elections in whcich no candidate recieves a majority of the votes cast." This lets us know that the Electoral College is doing a good job on keeping the votes clean and simple to understand. Also stated in the same source and paragraph "There is no pressure for run-off elections when no candidate wins a moajoity of the votes cast; that pressure, which would greatly complicate the presidential electionn process, is reduced by the Electoral College, which ivariably producess a clear winner..." That tells me that the Electoral College is keeping the votes on point.

There are some people out there who don't agree with the Electoral College and dont like the way the votes are being put in because sometimes the president that they chose wasn't elected. They are wrong to disagree with the Electoral College because the College keeps everything going in order and in a clear path to let us know who our president will be. As stated in Source Two paragraph Ten "Under the electoral college system, voters vote not for the president, but for the slate of electors, who in tur elect the president. This makes them disagree because they think that the Electoral College doesn't vote for their president, but they souldn't worry because they way they vote is by how many states helped the electors to vote for that presient being chosen as the president. Also In Source Two "At the most basic level, the electoral college is unfair to voters. Because of the winner-take-all system in each state, candidates don't spend time in states they know they have no chance of winning,focusing only on the tight races in the "swing" states." That makes some people diagree also, but the Electoral College doesn't count how many people in each big or small state voted for president. All the college does is help the governmtent elect for the president that they most support and elect for.

I agree that the Electoral College should be kept in favor because of all the help that it gives us and the government. Also the College helps us stay balanced on the votes so that nothing gets missplaced or missunderstood. Most of all it avoids problems during the election so that the people and the government are satisfied with their votes. The Eletroal College is a great way to keep things going at a clear election of the year. The Electoral College doesn't need any changes for me because even if they chose on the elections of the government the votes of the people still count to them as well. The votes of the peopel are important to the Electoral College just as much as the government's votes are.    When it comes to driving on the road, the use of a phone is the number one leading cause to car accidents. While reading and texting is prohibited when driving, phones tend to be a reliable resource which helps improve our daily life.

Phones help us in many ways when it comes to driving. They help navigate us in unknown areas, and it is a great form of contact in case of emergencies. Although it tends to be distracting, technology has advanced that we can have our eyes on the road while communicating with others.

Over the years technology has evolved rapidly so that it could make life easier for us, such as bluetooth. Bluetooth is a setting on a smart device like a phone, where you can connect wirelessly with another piece of hardware, like headphones. So, if someone tries to call you while driving, all you have to do is press the button on your headphones, and you will have the ability to call, or hang up the phone.

Phones can be a great use of navigation. With sources like Google maps, it has replaced all normal paper maps for when it's time to enter a new area. Not only were the original maps were a disturbance to drivers, but your phone can literally tell you how, when, and where to take you. Whether it is warning you about construction, or when to turn left or right, your phone is there to help for this uncanny situation.

Communication is very important in this day in age. So if you were scheduled for an appointment but you are late due to traffic or for an emergency situation, you can use your phone during that situation and explain why you need to reschedule. Not only that, but if you arrive at a destination, but having trouble finding a person you need to pick up, you can just give them a call, and tell them to start heading outside.

Texting while driving is a really problematic situation when it comes to acquiring a vehicle. It will lead you to bad injuries, or even death. But if a driver uses these ideas and guideline while driving, phones would not be a controversial topic that it is now. Drive smarter, and have good safety when it comes to driving. There are many positive ideas to the driverless cars of the future. Not having to drive, uses less gas and oil, and less crashes. Even though these are all good points to make about the driverless car, autonomously driving cars will not bring the driverless function untill the technology is available. If these driverless abilities malfuntion, people will get hurt with no idea if it was a driver or the computer had an issue. Alse, There will always have to be a driver alert for these cars to make the right decisions if there were to be crashes or construction sites.

The self driving vehicles of the future have many sensors and radars. This technology is not cheap in the current years. Yes, there is better technology than the year of 2000, but it will not be cheap to convert or buy a vehicle with all the sensors and laser beam radars. Companies will have to invest loads of money into this technology for it to become affordable. Maybe the company wants to spend that money but others will most likely not want to invest lots of money into driverless cars.

if the driverless car is put into production, the switching period will take many years for it to catch onto. There will be a mix of driverless cars and driver depedant cars. Like before, some companies will take longer to produce driverless cars than others. With this mix in cars that can drive themselves and cannot, there will be issues of liability with these issues. For example, if there were to be a crash with a driverless car and a regular car, who would know who was at fault? The driverless car will blame the manufacture and cause many unneeded court cases.

The cars today that have driverless like capabilities will need driver support. It is highly unlikey in the next year or so that they make a magical car that can drive itself through a constructionzone or a pileup on the freeway. There will need to be an alert driver to guide the car through these caution zones. There will need to be a huge leap in technology for that to happen and to fit this technology to everyday people's cars. This will cause the manufacture large sums of money for the production of this tech.

Driverless cars will indeed become reality. This may happen in 10 years or 50. The only thing to worry about this becomeing reality is the testing and the transition. Testing will happen on closed or maybe open streets. Also, the mix betweeen driverless cars and driver cars will bring the biggest problems in terms of liability. Untill this technology becomes readily available for consumer cars for an understandable price, there will always be a driver in the car having to steer for tricky situations and road hazzards. There are both positive and negative aspects mentioned in having a driverless car.

While driverless cars seem new and exciting, they aren't practical.

I don't think that having these new cars is a good idea.

I feel like there are a lot better ways to spend our time than trying to develop this car that we don't even need.

We are doing just fine with the cars we have currently.

They mentioned that they aren't even completely driverless as of now.

Why do we call these driverless if that's not even true?