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Nothing is worse than a problem that requires you to choose between multiple things. Sometimes you need a little guidance so you can stay on the right course. We can't view asking for help or advice as a weakness. We first need to observe the benefits. Wisdom, different perspectives and satisfaction are all reasons why seeking multiple opinions is so great.

Wisdom plays a big role in decision making.

There are people that have been through what you are going through, and can give you sound advice. This advice can be better than normal advice because not only do they understand the situation, they probably know what you've been going through on top of that. These people have learned from mistakes they have made, and know how to avoid them. Seeking an opinion from someone with experience will always be a sound decision.

We often count out people with opinions that aren't similar ours, but we fail to realize the reason for varying perspectives.

When faced with a decision to make, no matter how small, our judgment can become clouded.

To another person who isn't dealing with that problem at first hand, things look a little clearer for them.

They can provide an unbiased opinion that you probably needed.

These people can also open you up to ideas that you hadn't even considered.

When it's all said and done, sometimes we don't end up with the outcome we would have preferred. But knowing that you tried the hardest you could and exhausted every possible resource leaves you with a slight satisfaction. Seeking out multiple opinions may not have gotten you what you wanted, but you can move forward with this new information feeling better about yourself, and better about the future.

With all this new information, you can now face your problem head-on and know just what to do. We've established that there are a multitude of benefits to seeking multiple different opinions.

Wisdom, different perspectives, and satisfaction.

Its now up to you to decide if utilizing this info is in your best interest. Making decisions can be tough but that's just my advice.Attention my fellow citizens, we should limit car usage  because limiting car usage will release stress, reduce greenhouse gas emissions from tailpipes, and stop smog.

First, we should limit car usage because driving a car can be stressful. For example say you just got finished with a hard day of work and it was not the best day, You hop in your car and when you start to drive you look ahead and see a trafic jam. After working all day, getting in a car to wait hours and hours to get home is not peaceful or fun. Another example would be when you're on the road and the people around you are not driving safely. "When I had a car i was always tense. I'm much happeir this way," said Heidrun Walter, a media trainer and mother of two.(In geram suburb life goes on, paragraph 3)

Not only does the usage of cars cause stress but it also causes greenhouse gas. The use of cars should be limitted because we could drastically reduce greenhouse gas emissions from tailpipes. "Passenger cars are responsible for 12 percent of greenhouse gas emissions in Europe and up to 50 percent in some car-intensive areas in the United States." (In geram suburb life goes on, paragraph 5) Using a car to get around is nice but isint living on earth better than driving a gas powered vehicle and slowly destroying the earth? "All of our development since World War II has been on the car, and that will have to change," said David Goldberg, an official of Transport for America.(P7)

Finally, We should limit the usage of cars because if we do we can stop smog. Smog is pollution that creates clouds all around and it is discusting and horrible for the earth. 'Bejing, China is known as one of the most polluted cities in the world."(Paris bans driving due to smog, Paragraph 14) After intensifying smog, congestion was down 60 percent and thats only after 5 days thats incredible!

All in all, we should limit car usage because if we can use cars less than we do, it will ease stress, reduce greenhouse gas, and finally clean the earth. What do you say, use your car less and get some exersize? Thanks for reading my fellow citizens. Driverless cars seem to be extremely close to releasing to the public. Many companies have been working on driverless cars for years. These cars have great potential to change the world of transportation. The cars have positive and negative aspects, but I believe that driverless cars will be a positive effect on the world.

Driverless cars could change the transportation. It would make it easier to go place to place. Driverless cars could prevent accidents from occurring in everyday traffic. These cars would be much safer than a car with a reckless driver. Millions of car accidents happen every year, but driverless cars could potentially prevent most of these accidents. With a driverless car, the passengers are safer because the car is programmed to work well. If there was an emergency, someone could take the wheel and have control of the car.

Driverless cars have great potential for public transportation. Driverless cars could act like a taxi or bus system. This system of driverless cars would safe people money by not owning their own car. It would be safer to have many of these cars. Millions are killed in drunk driving accidents, and these cars would give potential drunk drivers an alternative way to get home safely. These cars could be used in a public transportation system to help people travel in their every day lives.

Driverless cars are approaching quickly, and there must be decisions made on their involvement of people's lives. These cars would be safer than reckless drivers on the road. These cars have a potiental of changing public transportation, and they would make it more convenient and safer for others. Although there are some negatives to driverless cars, the amount of positive aspects outweigh the negative aspects. Driverless cars should be developed and reach the public.Dear principle,

It would be fare to other kids if you put " you cant play any sports unless you have a B average or more". so many kids probably couldn't play their favorite sports and their parents would get mad enough to have them switch schools. lets put it this way, if you say they can have a C average in their grade the school would be a lot better place and wouldn't be as boring as it is. you could have a really good athlete who does every sport and is a super good running back for the team, real fast and every thing. what happens if he dropped from a

B average to a C average? that's what i am talking about. you can just at least say you have 2 weeks to get up your grades and if you don't then to bad so sad. if you're school is having a big dodge ball tournament after school and you have teams you play with and you have a C average then its really boring for you and your dodge ball team is one man short and they cant play because of you.

all the student would want to change that other than the really smart students who have A averages, but that isn't the case here. its just wouldn't be fair to all the other student who liked sports in that school. so can we just see how it goes.

sincerely, STUDENT_NAMEDear senator,

Many say that the Electoral College so not be used anymore, but some will come back and argue that it should be used.

Many people dislike the Electoral College because the say it is unfair or irrational. The Electoral College is way different than popular vote. Popular votes are actually done by the people and they pick who they want for president, but the Electoral College is done by a person picking someone of their state's goverment and then leaves it to them to pick their president. Te electorial votes are unfair because it deoends on how big a state's population is. Some states only have

3

Electoral votes, but if that state used its popular votes it would

A LOT

more than just three votes to one president.

Many people on the other hand do like the Electoral College. They like the Electoral College because the stae will have voted and not leave it to the people to. In 2012 only about one-half of elgible voters did vote. The Electoral College is said to be the most effecient way of voting by some people. People like the Electoral College more than popular voting is because in popular voting you will have certain people ote for cerain people not the best candidate, but in Electoral voting the person has nothing to do with the outcame so there will be no arguing on whos fault it is.

The Electoral College

NEEDS

to stay. If we get rid of the Electoral College the amount of votes in popular voting would be low to determine who they should pick. The Electoal College is the biggest reason we do so well on presidental winners.

From,

The People          Do you believe in aliens? If so do you believe them living in outer space or perhaps on a different planet? Imagine if you worked for NASA and you found pictures about an "Unmasking face on Mars". What would you do or even think about if you had seen faces on the surface of Mars?

I work for NASA and I have have found pictures about a face on Mars and through my perpectives I believe that its an alien on the surface on Mars. The reason why I believe this is an alien because the face is an absolute landform of an alien. These photos were taken 1976, 1998 and 2001. In 2001 the face evolted more like a face of what humans it was of humans but I've been doing research that these faces are from aliens.

Although it does look like a human face theres no body connected to it unless the body is stuck underneath the surface of the planet, but through my research I insist it's an alien. I do not have proof it is one but theres no proof of it being a human either. When the Mars Orbiter Camera went around Mars the face still had no evidence if it was either a human face or an alien artifact.

In my case I still prove this to be an alien. We've done plenty of research and nothing has been found is it is a human face or an alien. My question is if that it was a human why wouldn't have we known it was a human if it died. Where'd the rest of their body go? Perhaps it was trapped under the surface but in no question I still believe this is an artifact of an alien.The author supports his ideas in this passage good because he lists all the good details when he's going to support something. When the author talks about the Venus he has explantation showing how to explain that. In the passage it says " Venus is the second planet from our sun". It's also in our solar system, Venus is sometimes called '"Evening Star",is one of the brighest points in the sky. The author has different details and has found them.

The author talks about different stuff how our sister plant is so inhospitable". Scientists also see and search what's going on in the world and in the planets. I think it's good that we know some of these stuff so we know in the future that can happen. If you don't know none of these details you can search stuff online.

It's also good knowing these stuff because it's better to know them. Scientists do a lot of researching that's going around the world and earth. Also Venus is worthy to know what dangercan happen. It can get to 170 degrees Fahrenheit the air will be close to the area.

The solar power would be plentiful, and radiation would not exceed earth levels. Also says in paragraph 5 that's not easy conditions, but survivable for humans. Venus from a ship orbiting or havering safely far above. There is different facts about everything.

For the last paragraph it should be about how the world is working now. In paragraph 8 striving to meet the challenge presented by Venus. There should be limits by dangers and doubts but should be expanded to meet the very edges of imagination. Imagine exposing the cellphone and all that.Dear Principal,

To get a B in any subject is hard to achieve and all students have one bad subject which means less than ten percent of all students will be allowed to participate in sports and then most children and teens are either athletic or smart only about five percent are both so even less will participate even with those few being allowed to participate in these sports.

In the next paragraph I will explain more on what students will do to participate in sports or other activities and what this does to our school.

I think that the new policy would hurt our school in many ways.

Our students would drop out or change schools to participate in many sports. This could hurt the school as well. Money that comes out of school events that include all sports helps to pay for books and other learning material like paper, pencils, computers, notebooks, computers,

and workbooks.

This alone would hurt the school but as I said before children and teens need some sort of activities. To blow off steam or to get rid of some energy. Worst of all if they do drop out or move to a different school the amount of students at the school will drop dramatically as will it's grade point average.

As you can see changing the policy on sports will hurt our school in many ways. Less than half of the students will stay at the school.

The schools grade point average will go down and the school won't have the money to support the few that stay. Eventually the school will be shut down and all the teachers that work their will be laid off.